Example 2: Proposal Argument

     In the second student example, the student is proposing that the textbooks ASU purchases should be converted to electronic books that can be read on Ipads or Kindles. I agree with this argument because I find that the textbooks cast a lot of money and some chapters we don't even use in the books. 

If we were to get e-books students would also get a device to use it on. Technology like a Ipads or Kindles barely weight anything, where as text books are much heavier.For students that carry around their books from class to class, that means that they could have health concerns dealing with back problems. With e-books on weightless Ipads and Kindles, back problems are no longer a concern. With e-books students could also change text size for students that have bad eyesight, and other students can install auto-readers if they have difficulties with reading.

     This audience is made up of educators. Educators want to help their students any way they can. With the world getting more and more technological, it is important to keep up with the changes as a school system and it is also important that the students know how to adapt to the environment around them. Many students already know how to work technology and it is about time that the schools learn to improve the way that they teach its students. By getting student technology that helps improve work performance, the students will be able to understand more of what they are learning and for a school that is what they are set out to do.

     The writer doesn't give any personal stories, but they do quote a few sources in their work. Of the sources in their work they didn't correctly quote them. I didn't feel that the author was trying to reach out to the audience's emotional appeals. I would say that on a scale of 1 to 5, with 5 being of very strong ethos, I would put the author's ethos at around a 2.

     I think that this material is not the best for this assignment. The logic of this paper could have been covered and explained in better detail. The author didn't stick to one topic for long and it read more like they were reading off facts, rather then trying to persuade their audience into agreeing with them. The argument seems like it is barely held together and that it could have used more rhetorical strategies to make the paper stronger.

     The research used in this paper ranges from data collection to other schools in the Arizona area. They didn't seem to properly quote the people that they were using in their paper and when a piece of evidence was brought up that used the credited material, often a sentence relating to the subject or a figure, they didn't expand on the material or the source that they used. At times there was no explanation as to how their researched material had the credentials to be placed in the paper.